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    Zalgo the Imminent
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    Breaking the Beyond.

    Post by Zalgo the Imminent on Sat Oct 08, 2011 9:57 pm

    (I wrote this with a time limit of approximately 15 minutes and was only given one word. So this is my horrible poem. Because I suck at poetry.)

    Fire, Water, Air and Earth
    Are no longer worth what they were worth.

    The elements we plainly see
    Were split to be what they may be.

    Now ice and time and plants and space
    Have put the originals in their place.

    No more are they held by the chain that binds,
    But together do they seek their finds.

    And never see the Dark of day
    For Light is always in the way.

    A more beautiful sight to behold
    May not be found by the bitter cold.
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    Re: Breaking the Beyond.

    Post by Jade Hawk on Sun Oct 09, 2011 11:02 pm

    I like it! =D Was your one word "Element"? Just a guess. I think it's good. nice and simple. Poems don't have to contain strange rhythms or contain ridiculously intellectual words to be good! =D

    By the way... CV claimed , but that wasn't why I wasn't to reply.




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    Re: Breaking the Beyond.

    Post by Zalgo the Imminent on Sat Oct 15, 2011 1:39 pm

    Actually, the word was beyond.

    Don't ask how my mind related beyond to elements. I just work that way.
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    Post by Allen on Sun Oct 16, 2011 1:40 pm

    Probably because you apply the thought of Beyond, as something transcending material form, something at it's most basic. I.E that version of the four mythical elements.

    I would have related the Beyond to space, Hell, or uncertainty, but that's just me.
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    Re: Breaking the Beyond.

    Post by Zalgo the Imminent on Sun Oct 16, 2011 3:22 pm

    That's what most of the people there wrote about. Also about "transcending their existence to break free of pain because they're wusses."
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    Re: Breaking the Beyond.

    Post by Allen on Thu Oct 20, 2011 9:52 pm

    Yeah. Because facing the horror of your existence is easy, right?

    Also, maybe you chose to do differently just because the other option was too mainstream. You dirty Hipster.
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    Re: Breaking the Beyond.

    Post by Alix Labe on Sat Oct 22, 2011 11:31 am

    very now shut up. I thought it was good.
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    Re: Breaking the Beyond.

    Post by Zalgo the Imminent on Mon Oct 24, 2011 3:06 pm

    Alix, don't be offended by Cryptic if the OP isn't. A little tip there.

    Also, Cryptic, Fact. On both counts.

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